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Incoming notice: Im at a friends house this weekend. I have herd all of your complaints on the speexh bubbles. Ill fix them when I get back home if not this week. And in advance Im sorry. I got western and eastern style comic bubble comic format all mixed up. Thats my fault with my ADD and OCD. XD

I blame Discord.

I submited it cause I was wrong, Thanks Seth ::::::DDDDDDDDDDD

I was going to try and do the "2 Day Drawing Training Grounds - Service Edition" On EQ But with a 40 hour job and 9 hours a day or more sometimes (Tell me how that dosnt add to 40 and I will simply say Walmart) So really I should just stop trying all together with those things. Because I missed the dead line...BIG TIME D: [link]
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The good thing is I put together something despite my chance I even trying to enter. Idk it's sorta dull to me but I think it's sorta funny.

If you can think of what Pinkie Pie should say pun wise I'll totaly give you credit if this one is lame

Well that's it!~ lates.
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An overall really awesome comic strip. Humorous, original and well drawn and coloured. Vision wise, I thought it was clever having Trixie wanting to be a part of the main crew and would go to such lengths as to perform mundane tasks for the current main six, something that I think could actually happen if it were to be in an episode. Though I can't give it 5 stars as the whole idea of Trixie trying really hard to become friends with one or more of the main cast or secretly loving them has been done quite a bit before.

For originality, I thought it was quite unique. I'm yet to see another comic or image that shows this kind of scenario, nor anything that resembles it too much. No real gripes here.

For your technique, the art style is wonderful. Really vibrant, very stylised and unique, exciting and fun to look at. Though I had to take a star off for one fairly big reason: your speech bubble placement. Reading through the comic was fairly confusing, as the speech bubbles were placed all over the comic. It should read from right to left, top to bottom. In this case, Trixie's text should be placed above Rainbow Dash's and to the left, with Rainbow's the the lower right of hers. Pinkie's speech should be above Applejack's, as should Spike's, as it makes no sense reading it otherwise. It took my quite a bit to figure out what was being said. For that, you get a 4/5 for Technique.

Overall, the comic is very well done, despite a few minor flaws, and the humorous story paired with the vibrant art style gives the comic a big impact on readers. Overall, very well done.
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LunaMallroy16016Luna Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2015
Pinkie's face xD It just… I can't help but laugh at it xD
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:iconstar-von-alicorn:
Star-Von-Alicorn Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
XD
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:iconpaulisinthehouse:
Paulisinthehouse Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
:iconappledashplz: tell nopony okay Aj? Okay. :iconbrohoof2plz:
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:iconpaulisinthehouse:
Paulisinthehouse Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
:iconliarjackplz: chocolate milk! :iconbrohoof1plz::iconbrohoof2plz:
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:iconrtdk:
RtDK Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013
Pinkie's last expression kind of says, "Do Want" to me.  :|
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GuardianAngel2004 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
id get it..
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:iconzappo210:
zappo210 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013
setup to a clopfic.
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:iconwilson8787:
Wilson8787 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
Setup to many clopfics I'm sure.
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:iconscarecrow113:
Scarecrow113 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Liarjack returns!

Chocolate milk is now my excuse for everything

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:icondjrubywubsloveu:
DJRubywubsloveu Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Student Digital Artist
pinkie's face it looks jsut liek the master's evil face O_O
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:iconsilnev:
Silnev Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013
I don't get the joke.
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:iconcolbert455:
Colbert455 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
Its a lesbi joke apple jack was saying when they did it and.. Its kind of a long story o.o so she kept her mouth shut ..
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:icontwilightpoopsparkle:
TwilightPoopSparkle Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Trixie has a weird backside
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:iconsplashcute:
splashcute Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
a lol!
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:iconhoneyheart1190:
HoneyHeart1190 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist

HOW THE HAY WERE YOU ABLE TO GET PINKIE'S FACE LIKE THAT?!?!?!

TOTALLY HILARIOUS!!!!

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StrawberryPonyArtist Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
hehe
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:iconimagurl123:
imagurl123 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Student General Artist
Oops! ........I think I've fainted. 
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:iconstrawberryponyartist:
StrawberryPonyArtist Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
I felt like that to
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:iconimagurl123:
imagurl123 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Student General Artist
LOL WE ALMOST HAVE THE SAME PROFILE PICS
(AND IKR) 
:D (Big Grin) 
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:iconstrawberryponyartist:
StrawberryPonyArtist Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Heh Yeh
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:iconlkz665:
lkz665 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wait. what?
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:iconunknownalicorn:
UnknownAlicorn Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
OOOOOOOOOOOO Apple Jack has a secret!!!!
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:iconhaunted9:
Haunted9 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oh may gawd that is scary! lol
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:iconunknownalicorn:
UnknownAlicorn Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
YHEA!
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:iconicecrystall:
IceCrystall Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Make A Part 2
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:iconwilson8787:
Wilson8787 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
:iconmolestiafrontplz::iconsaysplz:Yes please make a part 2!
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:iconallfather-vohas:
Allfather-Vohas Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Bad Idea, really bad Idea.... Then We'll know what they did.
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agnesjoey Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Student Artist
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Skygirl10 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
I would like some too!!!
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sonicXrulesall Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013
:iconbrohoof1plz::iconbrohoof2plz:
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YveltalPursuit Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student Digital Artist
In the desc you said speexh bubbles XD
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:iconxnatox:
XNatoX Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013
( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
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:iconzafiro2jol:
Zafiro2jol Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013
i don't get it :s
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:iconmonet2002:
monet2002 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
AJ was saying she should know about RD's butt because one time they *ahem* anyways, she almost sayd it :3
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:iconthunderstormin:
ThunderStormin Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
pinkie's face in the last panel says it all
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:iconavixl:
avixl Featured By Owner May 23, 2013
......because AJ is a lucky pony
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Dragonfang1215 Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
You might say it's a
-apply sunglasses-
Sensitive Issue.

You might say this came
-apply sunglasses-
from behind.

This Whole situation is:
-apply sunglasses-
Applejacked up.

Throw all the puns, see what sticks!!!
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Wilson8787 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013
I really like Pinkie's face in the last panel. :iconpinkiepie-plz:
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:iconwarriorcats098:
WarriorCats098 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Professional Photographer
Chocolate Mlk. XDDDDDD
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:iconwarriorcats098:
WarriorCats098 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Professional Photographer
Milk*
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:iconsirlucariojoe:
sirlucariojoe Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   Artist
LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLO
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:icondiscordantprincess:
DiscordantPrincess Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
Pffft, chocolate milk!

Hey now, there doesn't have to be a sexual undertone to this...I give my friends backrubs all the time, it doesn't mean we're doing it when our other friends aren't looking!...naive DiscordantPrincess is naive.
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Holhander Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
great...just great,now "chocolate milk" along with "cake" is now a metaphor for sex...
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:iconcrystal-secret:
Crystal-Secret Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
o_o I didn't have any intentions for that? did I srsly make it sound like that? oh gwad.... >>: why do I do things and sublimely do things without knowing Im doing things >>;
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:iconholhander:
Holhander Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
well it just kinda cuts off at "when we-" now when you connect the two:

"when we...chocolate milk..."

its not "when we *make* chocolate milk" or anything P:

and (kinda off topic) also rarely do we ever see the reward mario gets after saving the princess other then "cake". P:
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Tatsurou-san Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Okay, I want to know what 'that one time' was.
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madman12000 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Omnomnom
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:iconzen133:
zen133 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
applejack, no takin that back and no turnin' back.
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AlliTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't get it :iconapplejacklieplz:
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TristanHawthorne Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
I honestly don't get the joke here. It leaves me confused.
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