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MLP The Fallen Moon Chapter 1 page 2 by Crystal-Secret MLP The Fallen Moon Chapter 1 page 2 by Crystal-Secret
Second page, I'll post more words n stuff later. I just have one thing to say

"cloud drifting, cool idea huh?" don't'll find out >>;

also Luna boom is now canon. HAH! Because Luna is best boom...or w.e.

Hey there, This is a comic book idea I have about the show My Little Pony Friendship is Magic. I'm doing this because I'm a fan of the series and want to give back to the community with something that I can do best, go as deep as possible with the lore that is Nightmare Moon.


After Princess Celestia and her younger sister, Princess Luna, gained prosperity over the new continent Equesrtia, they established a order to rule the land in fair honesty and Respect to everypony kind. Princess Celestia would raise the sun, while younger her younger sister would raise the moon. Together the two sisters bound a pack to keep to there duties and create harmony and balance for there subjects and those they cared for, those that lived on the land they helped fix to live and laugh upon. They kept order and Balance Keeping the Sun up during the day, and the Moon at night. But not all was well, as they say as time grew, so did the younger sister's wants and needs of hating constantly being shut out. Since at night everypony sleeps and simply can not play, and so this is where are story starts. Princess Luna decides to take a flight stroll in the Equestrian skys, going about her night, as we would go about our day. These are the days before everything the two sisters knew and didn't know would change there lives forever. From the moment they placed there hooves on the soil they stand upon, there fate were sealed. Not even the Elements of Harmony, a power Celestia discovered to help her and her sister aid in battle to bring down the evil of the land, the symbolizing strength she kept close to her heart to guide herself, her sister and the world she cared for, all of this and still...nopony could see this coming.

and so our story beings.

Chapter 1: The Moon Princess

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I DO NOT IN ANY way work with Hasbro, I HAVE NOTHING to do with Hasbro, or create anything for Hasbro or anything to do with working on My Little Pony Freindship is Magic for Hasbro, it's characters or logos belong to Hasbo. I have full rights to fair creations. I have no intentions on making any profit off of anything to do with Hasbro or My Little Pony. I WILL NOT make any profit off of "The Fallen Moon" A orginal story describing what I THINK happened before Luna Became Nightmare moon and the events that lead up too it. Now get lost Copyright.

My Little Pony friendship is magic :iconfyre-flye:
Studio B (DHX) and Hasbro. All rights reserved to them.

Illustration and drawing, storyboard design and script by AJ Morga.
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In terms of story, I'm questioning if the fact that she "protects those that she sought within her time of crux" to be important to the story somehow. So your doing a good job story-wise because your creating questions through the story that cause viewers to want to continue reading in order to find out their answers. Keep that going.

In terms of art, I think that this one looks just as good as the last one and I especially like the additional Luna boom and the cloud spinning because not only do they look cool, but they makes sense with what is in the text box because it shows her determination to get wherever she is trying to go as fast as she can. Not only that, but it also emphasizes her desire to protect because of how fast it seems like she is trying to go. I also love how she sort of flies out of the last panel because it gives her speed a nice comic book feel to it. I think you did a great job on this page and I also think that you shouldn't downgrade the artwork because while it may take a longer time than if you downgrade it, not only will it be consistent but the art will also look really good in every single page which will gravitate more people to read the story. But anyway, great job with this page. I look forward to further pages in the future.

Kudos. /]*[\
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wolfwaker101 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
Soliassoul Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Whoa! A Sonic Moonboom! That would be so cool!
dragonofbrainstorms Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student General Artist
like the 1st panel
LilyLocket Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sonic NightBoom :3 Awesome illustrations :D
caballero-nocturno Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
so very beautiful QwQ
englishwitch Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
sonic night boom! awesome!
ShogunGhidorah Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
Luna is the awesome and beautiful

don't stop the comic
BerryPAWNCH Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
Ooh another MLP Comic! Always up for a good read.

I hear you on the need to downgrade. It can be awesome having a story you want to get out in the most detail possible. But in the end you can feel burned out when you put so much into a single page and think about all the later ones you'll have to do as the abyss stares back.

Of course no matter what the art quality I'm a big fan of webcomics! Looking forward to see where you take this one.
avixl Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
WOW :omfg: Dat Luna!!
AngelGozen Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
Luna boom! Cool, a comic based on Luna, good times. I like the narration so far. So I guess Luna is just as good as rainbow dash huh?
cajobif Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013

I'm so happy someone make a comic about Luna as being awesome and beautiful.

And flying.
iamli3 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
uh when was that so?.....
MDSK-RB Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
The level of the artwork is just amazing. I don't mind to wait because its worth it :)
NIELSPETERDEJONG Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Awesome comic! :D
zara918 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Woah this is intense
Nalesia Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Oh, please keep this level of artwork. This is beautiful! Thanks for sharing.
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